Hello, Je suis en terminale S et j'ai un DM à rendre en anglais samedi. Il s'agit d'un type BAC. Donc je l'ai fini mais j'aimerais cependant si c'est possible, que vous me corrigiez mes fautes d'orthographe ou m'aidiez à améliorer mon écrit avec des expressions, thank you.
1. The narrator’s name is Richard Bransson. His age group is 60 and he is a British industrialist. Concerning his social status, Richard Bransson is crossed by the middle class to the billionaire class. He has two children who are Holly and Sam. He loves his family and he gives a lot of advices to his children for their future career.
2. He wrote this letter before his crossing in hot-air balloon. This journey could be without return so in this letter Richard Bransson decided to give advice to his children whish can guide them in the future life (in his absence). His main advice is to take advantage completely of the life, of every minute, and to take care of their mother Two aspects of his personality can be revealed: he is dutiful for his family and he is responsible because he plays his father's role.
5. For the narrator, “this balance” means poise between the work and the fun. According him, work and pleasure are compatible. In effect, with his work he has had fun and he has made money.
6. “A Christmas celebration” is not a suitable title. In effect, he didn’t celebrate Christmas he made a business around Christmas and more particularly around Christmas trees. It was more occupied to working during this period.
7. A) The plan was to grow Christmas trees for sold them at the time of Christmas. So he plant with his friend (Nik Powell) 400 seedlings in their field at home. He found it great because Christmas trees grew themselves (line 36) and everyone wanted a Christmas tree. In effect it’s a cash crop (line 35-36). B) The narrator thinks this business worth waiting for. In effect, he made 795 pounds in profit (line 50). Furthermore, we have to work hard to have money. In effect, money doesn’t grow on tree (line 51). And finally, maths is very important to be able to make calculate to have the maximum of profit (line 45).
8. The tone in the last paragraph is funny. In effect, he said line 51: “money doesn’t grow on trees” what is true and funny. Then concerning rabbits; he said all our friends had rabbit pie with his 5 pounds investment and “We all - except the rabbits - gained something” (line 35-36). This “ – except – “ is funny.
Message édité par karim60 le 02-11-2010 à 20:48:21
Marsh Posté le 02-11-2010 à 20:47:51
Hello,
Je suis en terminale S et j'ai un DM à rendre en anglais samedi. Il s'agit d'un type BAC. Donc je l'ai fini mais j'aimerais cependant si c'est possible, que vous me corrigiez mes fautes d'orthographe ou m'aidiez à améliorer mon écrit avec des expressions, thank you.
1. The narrator’s name is Richard Bransson. His age group is 60 and he is a British industrialist. Concerning his social status, Richard Bransson is crossed by the middle class to the billionaire class. He has two children who are Holly and Sam. He loves his family and he gives a lot of advices to his children for their future career.
2. He wrote this letter before his crossing in hot-air balloon. This journey could be without return so in this letter Richard Bransson decided to give advice to his children whish can guide them in the future life (in his absence). His main advice is to take advantage completely of the life, of every minute, and to take care of their mother
Two aspects of his personality can be revealed: he is dutiful for his family and he is responsible because he plays his father's role.
5. For the narrator, “this balance” means poise between the work and the fun. According him, work and pleasure are compatible. In effect, with his work he has had fun and he has made money.
6. “A Christmas celebration” is not a suitable title. In effect, he didn’t celebrate Christmas he made a business around Christmas and more particularly around Christmas trees. It was more occupied to working during this period.
7. A) The plan was to grow Christmas trees for sold them at the time of Christmas. So he plant with his friend (Nik Powell) 400 seedlings in their field at home.
He found it great because Christmas trees grew themselves (line 36) and everyone wanted a Christmas tree. In effect it’s a cash crop (line 35-36).
B) The narrator thinks this business worth waiting for. In effect, he made 795 pounds in profit (line 50). Furthermore, we have to work hard to have money. In effect, money doesn’t grow on tree (line 51). And finally, maths is very important to be able to make calculate to have the maximum of profit (line 45).
8. The tone in the last paragraph is funny. In effect, he said line 51: “money doesn’t grow on trees” what is true and funny. Then concerning rabbits; he said all our friends had rabbit pie with his 5 pounds investment and “We all - except the rabbits - gained something” (line 35-36). This “ – except – “ is funny.
Message édité par karim60 le 02-11-2010 à 20:48:21