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je l'ai suprimer parce que je pense que sa ne servira personne.
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Si je peux me permettre une suggestion : essaye d'écrire directement en anglais, sans passer par le français. Parce que là c'est vraiment pas génial, tu es parasité par les tournures de ton texte en français (qui en plus n'est déjà pas super bien formulé).

et si tu recherchais la VO du livre ?
 
sinon je suis d'accord avec hald. Il ne faut pas penser en francais puis traduire en anglais mais penser directement en anglais (je sais, c'est plus facile à ecrire qu'a faire).
 
De plus, ca ressemble bcp à une restranscription "automatique". Une personne qui a un petit niveau d'anglais, sait qu'une chambre c'est "room" ou "bedroom" si on veut insister sur le fait qu'il y ait un lit et non "chamber".

 
hehehe tres bonne idée sauf que là c'est à partir de la VO du livre qu'il faut immaginer le passage precedent, donc immagine la tete de la prof quand elle va lire le passage qu'elle conmpter nous distribuer en correction  ...
ecrir directement en anglai j'y est penser mais j'y arrive vraiment pas ...  
 

It was 11 pm past and jacque Sauniere had not still appeared. Langdon, tired by the conference, decided to go to rest in its room, in the hotel Noksi. Arrived at this one, he opened it and went to the small piece of furniture where he had stored the letter that had sent him two weeks previously his old friend, SAUNIER. The letter was an invitation for a conference which was held in Paris.  Langdon had accepted the invitation on one hand because he always was to intereser by the conferences on the art history, which were pronounced by specialists, but which addresses a wide public. And particularly, that, current, concerning the relations which maintained the art and the religion. And on the other hand because many years are crossed since his last meeting with SAUNIERE. But strangely this last one not either to the conference or to the usual meeting with Langdon from not every conference. Langdon supposed that he had to be sick, where to have rather important concerns to appear at the conference. Langdon, decided to go, the next day, to visit him in the Louvre, where he is the curator.  

Voilà ma correction, je n'ai pas pu mettre les mots coorigés en gras, mais ça me sembele pas mal...
It was 11 pm past and jacque Sauniere had not still appeared. Langdon, tired by the conference, decided to go to rest in its room, in the hotel Noksi. Arrived at this one, he opened it and went to the small piece of furniture where he had stored the letter that had sent him two weeks are crossbefore his old friend, SAUNIER. The letter was an invitation for a conference which was held in Paris.  Langdon had accepted the invitation on one hand because he has always been interested in conferences on the art history, which were pronounced by specialists, but which addresses a wide public. And particularly, the current one concerning the relations which maintained the art and the religion. And on the other hand because many years were gone since his last meeting with SAUNIERE. But strangely the man did not go to the conference or to the usual meeting with Langdon from not every conference. Langdon supposed that he should be sick or  having rather  huge concerns to not go at the conference. Langdon, decided to go, the next day, to visit him in the Louvre, where he is the curator.

merci Phive, pas grave le gras  

Méthode: copié + collé de ton texte, et plutôt que de corriger faute par faute je ré-écrit en conservant tes tournures un maximum.
 
It was past 11 pm and Jacques Saunière still hadn't shown up. Langdon, tired from the conference, decided to go back to the Noksi hotel to rest in his room. Once there, he opened the door and went to the small piece of furniture in which he had stored the letter sent to him two week before by his old friend, Saunier. The letter was an invitation to a conference held in Paris. Langdon had accepted the invitation because, for one, he had always been interested in conferences about art history, especially when they were aimed at a wide public but were still held by specialists. He was particularly interested in the relationship between religion and art. On the other hand, it had been a long time since his last meeting with Sauniere. Strangely however, he had not turned up for the conference, nor was he there after the conference to meet with Langdon as they usually did. Langdon supposed he was sick, or had something particularly important on his mind, important enough to miss the conference. Langdon decided he would visit him at the Louvre the following day, where Saunier was the curator.

 
je s'avis que certaine phrase n'allais plus rien dire, c'est pourquoi j'ai mis le texte en françai aussi...  

mince, j'avais pas vu. désolé je rajoute.

merci  

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